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Subject: lost soul
Replies: 5 Views: 400
dyke 9.05.11 - 01:19pm
she sits in the fear they screaming at her do it do it do it do it you a coward go ahead and do it she panics she cries she wipes her tears as someone approaches when they look at her she smiles and laughs strikes a good conversation whilst her hearts beating in her throat and her pulse races inside she cries she screams but nobody can hear a single cry for help the person leaves and shes left once more in the darkness of her mind nd soul she decides to fight yet shes tired and cant fight back nomore so she asks herself the question and her answer becomes DO IT!! *
nuqi 9.05.11 - 03:13pm
Strong imagery, great climax and a well structured flow full of poignancy and a high vigor. *
nuqi 10.05.11 - 01:07pm
I'd say its not eerie,its purely the essence of any peotry genre to portray ones' feelings,emotions and experiences.No matter how dark, poetry has a way of relieving the writer from torment.Your ability change the an ambiance of cynicism to sheer splendor makes you an exceptional artist. *
dyke 10.05.11 - 01:48pm
thanx i dont try to be a great writer just want the silent voices to be hears *
fanking 24.05.11 - 09:37am
wow. this is really nice. like nuqi said, strong imagery. *
dyke 25.05.11 - 12:04pm
thanx chrispin *
